Into that old familiar place,
I fall freely, effortlessly...
It's cold and dark now...
And the world, upside down.
Across the frozen lake,
I see him. He too had fallen.
Or perhaps was thrown, headfirst.
As old as time itself,
He is not as though he seems...
In the damp and pitch black air,
I light a candle.
In the ice beneath my feet,
The bodies begin to stir,
They both fear and lust for light.
His face shows marks of suffering,
Traces of regret, scars of betrayal,
And the deep void emptiness...
The result of being forgotten.
My muscles begin to tense,
As the cold begins to grip my tired bones.
The old and forgotten god smiles.
And through the shadows,
I can see his eyes.
Exhausted, he looks to the flame.
I look back at him,
And, catching his gaze, I smile back,
As if to say, "Thank you."
Thursday, May 13, 2010
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Edward's "A Mishmash of Hogwash" inspired me write about Satan from a romantic perspective, pulling in some concepts from "The Inferno" and, in a true romantic sense, seeing Satan as Prometheus.
A side note, the poem has nine lines per stanza, and if all of the nines were turned upside down...as in the first stanza everything is turned upside down...we end of with three sixes. An unintentional effect that just happened when I wrote this. (If I were superstitious, I might be a little creeped out.)
Nice. Could this be a metaphor for someone who hasn't written for a while, but takes up the habit again? Just sayin' (as I raise my hand).
I read this and immediately catch illusions to Paradise Lost, but that's probably a consequence of my background. I like how the "world, upside down" is frozen as opposed to the popular flames. Given the choice by Frost, your speaker would choose ice.
To me, I see the speaker as Prometheus, since he brings fire to Satan. If you want Satan to be seen as Prometheus, shouldn't he be more excited than exhausted when he sees the flame?
Several Romantics saw Satan as a Prometheus figure...knowledge being the fire or vice a versa...depending, I guess, on perspective...
In any case, good point about the use of exhaustion. Upon reading it again, I see several potential changes.
Thanks for the feedback. I may revise and repost this today, time permitting.
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