We turn on others.
It's our nature.
And when the warmth
and security of the
hearth get too comforting
we walk out to search the
tall grass
for no reason in particular,
and we never look back
or care about feelings.
Like a lion eating it's young, only in reverse.
3 comments:
Biting the hand that feeds.
Hi Chris!
the punctuation in the first two lines forces the reader to really pause and take in that line. We turn on others. It's in our nature. This is so "matter-of-fact" that the reader cannot argue with the simple truth of it. The story you tell is bitter, yet again, truthful. I've done it, I feel horrible for it, and my daughter will probably do it to me too one day. The last line is wonderful.
Thanks.
I agree with Brandi on the first two lines and their matter-of-factness because they ring so true. The last line is rather long considering your typical style but it's very effective here. The comma setting off "only in reverse" causes the reader to pause and a line break would, but fits well on the same line.
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