I like this juxtaposition of polar oppositions, and I very much relate to it when reflecting on the differences between my brother and myself. Is this distance just the norm with siblings? I don't know. The second lines in both stanzas are my favorites, although I wonder if you can do without the "and" in the second stanza. Also, upon my first reading, I misread "wildness" as "wilderness." I wonder if that might work as well. Glad to see a post from you, Nooshin!
I particularly like the 2nd stanza. I think that the poem would resonate stronger without the qualifiers "ultra" and "extreme". I think that the words that they qualify are powerful enough and I like it better with fewer words.
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I like this juxtaposition of polar oppositions, and I very much relate to it when reflecting on the differences between my brother and myself. Is this distance just the norm with siblings? I don't know. The second lines in both stanzas are my favorites, although I wonder if you can do without the "and" in the second stanza. Also, upon my first reading, I misread "wildness" as "wilderness." I wonder if that might work as well. Glad to see a post from you, Nooshin!
I particularly like the 2nd stanza. I think that the poem would resonate stronger without the qualifiers "ultra" and "extreme". I think that the words that they qualify are powerful enough and I like it better with fewer words.
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