I decided to dabble in your realm, Tim. This is a revised version of an old faux-haiku I wrote a long time ago, now following the appropriate syllabic structure and with a new thematic relevance courtesy of you.
Edward, I really like this poem. It is so rich with color and imagery...and in such a small amount of space. Haiku!
Also, the title functions nicely as a metaphor and plays well into the double meaning: autuamn leaves and/or fire (which also has resonance with autumn).
The metaphor is strong here and I can fully "hear" the leaves. I like the word "brewing," it function well and also reminds me of fall/autumn... witch's brew, soup, hibernating emotions, death... and "spiced" works with this too.
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I decided to dabble in your realm, Tim. This is a revised version of an old faux-haiku I wrote a long time ago, now following the appropriate syllabic structure and with a new thematic relevance courtesy of you.
Yay! Haiku!
Edward, I really like this poem. It is so rich with color and imagery...and in such a small amount of space. Haiku!
Also, the title functions nicely as a metaphor and plays well into the double meaning: autuamn leaves and/or fire (which also has resonance with autumn).
Beautiful...
The metaphor is strong here and I can fully "hear" the leaves. I like the word "brewing," it function well and also reminds me of fall/autumn... witch's brew, soup, hibernating emotions, death...
and "spiced" works with this too.
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